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Addiction

By wild bill28 | Posted: 17 March 2009

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ADDICTION 

Do you no what this means
have you ever been a fen.
To no you have to have just one
more hit, to fell your body start to have fits.
You try to sleep, but it pulls at your mind.
So you are awake most of the time.
Then when its time to get up you have to do just one more.
  
For those who don't know let me help you.
Its not like some of you think, to be an addict.
It not just in you mind your body has to have .
You fell sick with out it you start to hurt.
Spasms start and your muscles jerk. 
You want it to stop so bad. 

It bring you so low that you give up and do some more,
and you cant just go and tell a friend. Because how would 
they look at you then.If you just had some one there to get
it off you mind ,and hold you when you start to shake.
To let them no their not alone that is the best way to 
help them a long. 
So now look out and see there maybe some one you can 
save.                                                         


for my brother Freddy
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mature gent
18 March 2009
I hope it has helped you to remove your blame this is written from the heart 
Ive seen many in my pubs who are trapped with addiction and know the pain of those who love them. Whilst its personal its also a subject that needs plenty of press keep up the good work
mature gent
Scottb
08 November 2009
The subject matter is good and you have a message that certainly comes across. However, the poem would work better, for me at least, if you controlled the lines of your stanzas better. I mean, try to make it easier for your reader by creating more rhythmic lines (not necessarily throughout all of the poem but especially in your 3rd stanza). You have the eye for the poem and I hope you can experiment with changing line, length, rhythm count and even the odd rhyme top create effect.

Good work, though.

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