Life by YoungPoet

Once in a while there's a mistake.
You stumble on the long path.
Gain your balance, a breath you must take.
Never let it keep you down.

Sometimes you'll need a companion.
More than once you'll need his help.
Sometimes you'll be the champion.
More than once you simply won't.

People will often treat you badly.
Justice will deal  with people like that.
Just carry on without them gladly.

Sometimes you'll have to choose.
The choice between right and wrong.
Do what you think is best, it doesn't matter if you loose.

Sometimes it won't be fun.
Difficult to keep on going.
Sometimes it's hard to see the sun.
Try, often you'll be okay.

Disappointment is always there.
So never get your hopes too high.
Life is not always fair.
Simply push on by.

Sometimes you'll see a problem.
Something you'll need to work around.
Stop, think hard.
Soon the answer will be found.

Sometimes you'll be feeling sick.
Stop a while and rest.
Sometimes you'll have no choice but to go on.
Try hard, deal with it your best.

You should know you can't always lead.
Sometimes you'll just have to follow.
Sometimes thats just what you need.

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Comments

Snow Cone

23 November 2008

Wow I enjoyed that poem.  My favorite part was the second paragraph and the first two lines whe you wrote "Sometimes you'll need a companion.  More than once you'll need his help."  Please keep up the good work.

Snow Cone

Arazmatazz

23 November 2008

A beautiful poem, full of insightful, honest and reverberating messages. I  enjoyed your use of short, sharp, citrus sentences such as 'Stop, think hard. Soon the answer will be found' You have an approach to writing that is honest, clear and full of your own personal truths, or so I believe. As an amateur writer myself, I strive to attain such seemingly simple language that is loaded with lucid meaning. 

I would only say that perhaps you could find a final line to add to your last stanza to make the poem feel more complete. I try always to read my work aloud and feel how the poem moves with regards to rhythm, especially if I am using a particular rhyme scheme or pentameter.