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This is good material, but i think you should use a bit more punctuation as it's basically one giant sentence, with the acceptions of one full-stop, one question-mark and one comma.
Thanks,
Jessie122 :)
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I really liked your poem. It could do with some work (I can't put my finger on quite what but I think something needs changing). It is an interesting and emotional poem. Your rejection of "following the herd" is fascinating. Still you will have a lonely life if you turn people away because they want you to look like them. In a way it's another form of caring. They want to share something they have found that works.
Well Done!
btw
Nice use of punctuation. The last verse and the "no." were powerful and the ending was strong.
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Excellent Poem. The use of words to describe how you feel and the way people need to be reminded that we are all individuals - not robots! Well done.
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I like this poem...nice to know you don't follow the crowd. :)
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