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This is so very good I'm lost for words! Its been wonderfully thought through - it could be the central theme for a novel and what an amazing exploration that would be. Well done.
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Thanks Poppy 101 for such a fantastic idea!
You know, I read your comment last night just before going to bed and by this morning, I have a plot in my head and have started bashing away on my computer!
I am excited!!!
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Definately a plot there but not, for me, a poem if that was it's intent. Looking forward to reading the novel.
Keep us posted.
JD
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Yes, I agree with the others that this may be better in prose than poetry form. It could make an interesting novella if you don't have enough for a full length novel. Or, of course, a short story. The theme is not a new one, but then there is very, very little that is new these days, so why not go for it and try just as you with have A Painful Gift. If you can do as well with this as you have with the other prose, it will certainly be worth the effort.
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Thanks! I've been working on this. Commnents like this keeps the fire burning when things slow down.
Cheers
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As much as i hate to agree with absolutely everyone i'm afraid i must.
as a poem this was could but as a novel or a short story i think it would work really well. as someone else said its not a new theme but i think it can be done differently so as to still make it interesting.
I hope you will post it for us to read!
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