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Unchained

By ChrissieJo | Posted: 08 April 2009

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To all those who have loved and lost
To all that have faced rejection, 
To all who have chosen to carve out a new path for themselves
and found a way out of thorny roads
This is for them. 
Read On.......


Just the other day I got the news that my father passed on.
I hate to think he died, but that's what happened.
It was expected but his demise was still a shock to those he loved.
An admired statesman; the news was everywhere.
TV, Radio, internet, newspapers and all.
 
I cried when I heard. Yes I wept till I felt cleansed.
My tears were for reasons that are endless.  
I cried that I never had time with him. 
That he was never there,  to protect me with his love 
like every father should.  
I cried that he didn't even try to find me 
even when his life was at an end. 

He left when I was so very young, 
with mum who had no clue 
what to do with a child of two
He left us to the world and they feasted like no tomorrow.
On the unwanted love child, of their much loved star. 
Life's journey was rough but mum did the best she knew
Her sadness was made bigger by father's insensitivity
His face and new family glossed the front of weekly magazines
He never spared a thought for us; this very big star,
with smooth chestnut brown skin, a ready smile.

All those years I ached. Then one day I stopped to want his love
I realised mum's worth , how much she cared. 
Mum taught me real love and made me what I am today.
Her love still burns in my heart though she is long gone.

Now my father's dead, the only shadow over me is gone.
At last I am unchained. 
Free to love my life. 
And best of all
I am free to love myself.
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Comments 
poppy101
28 April 2009
This is so very good I'm lost for words!  Its been wonderfully thought through - it could be the central theme for a novel and what an amazing exploration that would be.  Well done.
ChrissieJo
01 May 2009
Thanks Poppy 101 for such a fantastic idea! 

You know, I read your comment last night just before going to bed and by this morning, I have a plot in my head and have started bashing away on my computer! 

I am excited!!!
JD Higginson
01 May 2009
Definately a plot there but not, for me, a poem if that was it's intent. Looking forward to reading the novel.

Keep us posted.

JD
Scottb
06 November 2009
Yes, I agree with the others that this may be better in prose than poetry form. It could make an interesting novella if you don't have enough for a full length novel. Or, of course, a short story.  The theme is not a new one, but then there is very, very little that is new these days, so why not go for it and try just as you with  have A Painful Gift. If you can do as well with this as you have with the other prose, it will certainly be worth the effort.
ChrissieJo
06 November 2009
Thanks! I've been working on this. Commnents like this keeps the fire burning when things slow down.
Cheers
smcrutt
06 November 2009
As much as i hate to agree with absolutely everyone i'm afraid i must.

as a poem this was could but as a novel or a short story i think it would work really well.  as someone else said its not a new theme but i think it can be done differently so as to still make it interesting.

I hope you will post it for us to read!

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