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I realy like your poem. It's a little bit wordy in places but your diction is very good.
I have reworded it a little for you to make it sound better (to my ear, not necessarily to yours :P)
i always try to do the right thing
but people question me.
are they right, am I ignoble?
it is really, very iffy.
they are foolish, perhaps, to point at me
for a few miniscule mistakes.
their rude behaviour engrages me,
they stare at me like evil snakes.
i kick the ground frustratedly,
i feel peevish and angry
but some impolitical decisions
can invert their vision and make them friendly to me.
yes! there are some true and holy souls
who think good of us,
we should not act frenetically with a modicum of knowledge
and confuse in revenge and advice with a fuss.
so, there are also the ones who are
concerned about our well being.
we should never keep them far
from our hearts, which beat for love.
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Well done, misunderstandings, unfortunately this is human mistakes.
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