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Good stuff, Chrisblue. I enjoyed reading this a lot. I have a couple of minor comments - you have 'surly' instead of 'surely' in the third sentence. The kind of thing spellcheckers, don't point out! It's much easier to spot these things in other people's prose (I bet my prose is full of this kind of thing!)
In the second paragraph you might need to punctuate differently. Full stops instead of commas up until 'seven?' maybe.
Post some more stuff please!
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Thankyou i know it still needs alot of work and i need to correct and fine tune a lot of it (like all 7 chapters up to now) grammar, punctuation and to check all the spelling which im poor at but im enjoying writing it and any all feedback is much apreciated , so thank you
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