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Very intriguing! This paragraph makes me feel like the residents of Warsam Lane. I want to know what is happening too!
I especially like the use of repetition in the first line.
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I do love the paragraph but after "the mothers still chatting" there should be an 'and' instead of a comma. I would love to see what happens next! :)
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