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Liked what you were saying.
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I think Clifton is right about the first three words - you could just cut out two of the words altogether - sometimes less is more. I actually think the word rape fits - if you're talking about the extremes of human activity striping away the earths natural resources - is it not the same as selfishly and violently taking what they want with no regard for the recipient?
The last line jars a bit - I would be tempted to put:-
'Will still keep a silent watch on the planet...
on the run.'
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