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A strong and intriguing start. Looking forward to reading more.
Happy writing.
JD
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I really like your title -nice one! You have a typo in this sentence - The deceased had left the front door was open and even moved the furniture
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Very good! I enjoyed it very much, and it certainly makes me want to read more.
A few typos, but the grammar, spelling, and sentence structure are generally unimpeachable.
Anticipating the next installment... ;)
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Your opening paragraph kept my attention which for me, is a great start. I am sure you will in time give this more body.
A very interesting ready. Hope you will post some more.
Cheers
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I enjoyed this a lot, and it definitely made me want to read more. Keep it up!
Dragonwriter
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Great start really brought the reader into the plot - so what next?
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Thanks to everyone who viewed and/or commented.
I am working on the next installment.
Out of interest, I have just bought a very good book "How NOT to write a Novel" by Howard Mittelmark and Sandra Newman. I haven't finished reading it yet and it is too early to say whether it will imporve my writing. However, it is an amusing little read in its own right.
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That's a great book. It helped me a lot.
Looking forward to part 2... ;)
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I like your writing sytle and the subtle humor - especially SEP. Not my usual genre, but it was so well written and mysterious enough to make me want to read more. The flow was great, but not spelling out your numbers kind of put a tick in my chronic proofreading eye. I hope you post more soon, I'd like to see where you go with this.
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Great start, good set up and foundation - definitely enjoyed it but want more.
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