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De profundis

By Carl | Posted: 09 May 2011

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Leave me trapped
and I shall smile at you, mutely.
Free me with a look
and I shall attempt to speak.

I am a mute ablated thing,
impeccably restrained,
armed, cocked, primed to detonate
my speech upon you but I cannot

unless you permit me to:
I cannot express my need to speak to you
without that certain look - the key is in your eye.
I am too mute, too burrowed into my own eyes

and in the heart of my head too afraid
to speak uninvitedly - even to you.
Sometimes I have the caged, mute thing's urge
to startle - to speak, de profundis, out-of-the-blue,

as if through a periscopic tube. I could shock.
I could genuinely shock you if I permitted I
to shock you - with speech - but I encage me,
inescapably, because I am too silent to be seen.

Sometimes I have the glorious urge
to rage at the cage of my confinement
and to break this profound epoch of silence
but I cannot.

I am a mere skin-covered mute, sweet-smiling thing:
a gentle, feathered skeleton of convolution –
a caged thing – caged by a need for you
to manumit me. I burn gently sometimes

with a desire to be voiced, to be asinine, foolish,
loud, rancid - to boom and gloriously whisper
Hello? to you or even I love you!
but I cannot.

Leave me trapped
and I shall smile at you, mutely.
Free me with a look
and I shall attempt to speak.

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Rose Petals
12 May 2011

I like this metaphoric write very much Carl. You have displayed fine creative artistry thoughout the write, expressing thoughts and feelings with style. I like the repetition of some lines, they enhance and emphasise the deep feelings which flow effortlessly like liquid silk from your poetic pen. Good visual detail within the poem, painting a picture of shyness for your reader. I like the title of the poem very much, it drew me in to read the inking. I also like the layout of the write, it lends itself well to the flow of the poem. You express so well, with anger at times,  what it is like to be trapped by one's own shyness, Carl, never to be able to say what one wishes to, always kept caged by ones lack of confidence in themselves. So many of us can identify with that....... I enjoyed reading very much and I thank you for sharing this timeless write, crafted with proficiency. Blessings always, Carl...........

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