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A Story Concept

By Don9307 | Posted: 24 April 2009

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Here is a brief description of a story concept I'm working on.   I'd be interested to see if anyone thinks this is a good idea for a novel.   The working title is:  "Rails of Discovery."

Story Concept:  "Following the mind-numbing decline in the stock market in early 2009, the once successful Wall Street professional, Jack Bachman, says goodbye to his unfulfilling day job and hitches a ride on any train departing the Big Apple.  Where Jack goes doesn't really matter much to him.  Jack is a man who has had it up-to-here with the present doldrums and disappointments of his life. He's finally made up his mind he'll go anywhere on a train as long as it gets him far away from the big city and his big-city problems. On his journey down the tracks of America, Jack encounters many interesting people; some friendly and some not so much so; and, he meets with his share of trials along the way. But, best of all, for the very first time in his life, Jack is exposed to challenges he's never faced before; and, through it all, he ends up rediscovering who Jack Bachman really ought to be, along those "rails of discovery" across America.
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Dragonwriter
24 April 2009
I think it's a great idea, but it would be easier to understand if you gave examples of some of the people he meets and the challenges he faces. You may already have some ideas in mind as to what they might be. As a summary it's amazing.
Hope this helps.

Sincerely,

Dragonwriter
JD Higginson
24 April 2009
Interesting idea with good potential. All depends on the execution.

Good luck.

JD
Jennifer Munro
24 April 2009
I like the idea of using such a current and modern crisis but I also think you need to add something to the story that gives the reader an imperitive to read on. There must be a dilemma or a challenge that the main character has to face. You must bring him to the point where the reader asks, 'now what?' and then carry on to to show how the character either succeeds or fails. In other words the plot is a little thin right now and needs a central theme and driving force.

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