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I think it's a great idea, but it would be easier to understand if you gave examples of some of the people he meets and the challenges he faces. You may already have some ideas in mind as to what they might be. As a summary it's amazing.
Hope this helps.
Sincerely,
Dragonwriter
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Interesting idea with good potential. All depends on the execution.
Good luck.
JD
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I like the idea of using such a current and modern crisis but I also think you need to add something to the story that gives the reader an imperitive to read on. There must be a dilemma or a challenge that the main character has to face. You must bring him to the point where the reader asks, 'now what?' and then carry on to to show how the character either succeeds or fails. In other words the plot is a little thin right now and needs a central theme and driving force.
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