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Kids would love this. Beautifully written, though unless there's a reason why the names are Grognoths and Grotworts I would suggest chaging one to make them more dissimilar.
Good job.
JD
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I agree kids will really take to this.It has terror inducing yet funny and quirky feel of the best nursery ryhmes.
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Cute! Reminds me of Dr. Seuss - and I could just imagine a children's book of it with his style of illustration.
Just one thing: where you wrote 'lay,' it should be 'lie.' My language teacher would go crazy over that one.
Happy writing! ;)
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Many thanks for all your comments.
I have no idea why I named the creatures Grognoths and Grotworts. They just came to me and I liked them. The Grog's and the Grot's are similar creatures feeding off human skin and each other. Well, not really, but you know what I mean.
Reiner.
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It took a while for me to search and sort this one out; (lay in bed). It appears that to use lay in bed is more commonly used but the correct form seems to be lie in bed. Thanks to Zion for pointing it out.
Reiner.
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Wonderful poem Reiner - this needs to be read aloud to a class of gawping gasping children and spoken with as much expression as the poet can muster. I love the names and I'm pretty sure childen will too - they process similar sounding words much better than adults probably because they are easier to remember. If I had time I would read this to children and get them to draw/paint what they think the Grognoths and Grotworts look like.
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I think Zion's hit the nail on the head commenting on a likeness to Dr. Seuss' kooky offerings! Both very well written and entertaining.
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Many thanks for the comment.
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Made me think of the Gruffallo.
Excellent.
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