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Excellent poem! Don't think you need all the ellipses after each line or triple exclamation marks, but very well done.
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I like this, it's very thought provoking.
Dont think the exclamation marks are necessary. Overuse comes over as if you're instructing readers where to be surprised. This is why they are commonly known as 'screamers' in the trade
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