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The Man in the Hospital

By zion613 | Posted: 04 May 2009

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There was a nice man I would visit sometimes
In the hospital just down the street
He was just forty-two - ought to be in his prime
But was miserable, ailing, and weak

He spoke of his life: all the choices he'd made
That he wished that he would have made better
And one day I went - but I learned that he'd died
And he'd left me a sorrow-filled letter

"Young lady," he'd written - a tear smudged the ink -
"There's something I want you to know:
I've been ill these past years - 'twas my own fault, I think -
From my blunders I want you to grow

"Here's a piece of advice I bequeath you tonight
Whose value I learned too belated:
So long as one thinks only of the next bite
One's hunger will never be sated."

This man had heart troubles, his kidneys had failed,
And something was wrong with his liver
And as I reread his last sorrow-filled words,
I got chills and my hands were aquiver

When we eat our food -when we live our lives -
How often do we take a minute
To sit and enjoy the sheer pleasure of Now
And to rejoice and exult in it?

Instead, we gulp down all the food on our plates
Which we really ought to pause and savor
And then when we've finished, we think about how
We can't wait for our next meal later

And so, my dear friends, I share with you today
The advice that the man learned belated:
So long as one thinks only of the next bite
One's hunger will never be sated.
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Comments 
Michel Henri
04 May 2009
You have a good heart and wonderful writing skills, l love your work as it is so real, good stuff and please keep writing with your heart. Michel Henri
JD Higginson
04 May 2009
A good poem that starts really lively but feel loses some of it's charm towsrds the end.

Goodjob, though.

JD
zion613
04 May 2009
Thanks for your comments.

JD, could you explain?

;)
ChrissieJo
05 May 2009
5th stanza may be better placed in 2nd or taken out cos it takes away some of the flow. I Love the Theme.
Reiner
05 May 2009
I feel this sentiment is experienced by many people. Instead of eating to live, so many live to eat. 
I also think it is well written and just about long enough.

Reiner.
poppy101
05 May 2009
This poem runs like a horse  - loved it  - great job.
ruminate81
06 May 2009
This is a good one. 

I live to eat food at times, but that isn't really the point of this poem. 

Living your life in the present and not striving for that unatainable future too fast. Stop and smell the roses. Your whole life can skip you by as the sick fellow realized on his death bed.
zion613
06 May 2009
You got it, ruminate! That's the point! ;)
zion613
06 May 2009
Thank you all so much for your comments! ;)
JD Higginson
06 May 2009
I owe you an apology. I've read it since and didn't stumble once. Sorry for making the comment in the first place.

Keep it up.

JD
Shavalarj Hit
10 May 2009
I like it.  It is similar to my philosophy.  You can only enjoy yourself in the present.  So whathever you are doing, working or doing the garbage, you have to try to savour it.

Coincidentally, I am listening to Elvis Costello singjng Charlie Chaplin's "Smile" as I write this.

:-)
Jennifer Munro
11 May 2009
Very true - now where did I leave the chocolate!
MisterI
09 August 2009
I really liked this piece. A good message in a piece which flows nicely...
taylorswift97
09 January 2010
A very touching story put into a well written poem. 
taylorswift97

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