The Mother I love... by TheDarkNarrator340

The mother I love to whom I see
The greatest person that is only for me

She tends to my wounds, and shows she cares
The mom that does so much for me
In times before when my heart starts to bleed

She teaches me to read and write everyday
She fights light-hearted
Knowing I'm not retarded

She stood by my side and never betray
She doesn't act fake
Only filled with faith

Even in school, she ask for my best
Leaving no perfection
Only hard work and affection

The seasons passed and still she cares
And sends me food
Nothing like cruel

A smiling face to know it's okay
When the days are rough
She makes me tough

But now I'm older and my heart is cold
Her efforts and might a seasonal spice
But now has turned worthless and light

I blame the world for the way that I am
For being this way
For the mother I betray

Now I'm here, writing this out
Saying the words that I truly mean
Without sarcasm or being up scene

To atone for the time of being this way
I love you mom and "Happy Mother's Day"

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TheDarkNarrator340

11 May 2009

I wrote this to let the mother that I care about, know that even if I can't trust anyone anymore, I can least give her something back to make her life filled with joy and hope.

zion613

11 May 2009

You express some very touching and poignant sentiments, but you often sacrifice clarity in favor of rhyme. I'd love to see you try to work this out; it's definitely a worthy piece.

Good luck! ;)

Mr Richard

11 May 2009

Like the lines "She doesn't act fake,only filled with faith."
Has a lovely ring to it. The sentiment is good to.

Jennifer Munro

11 May 2009

This strikes me as writing from the heart. Well done! Writing means nothing if doesn't communicate something real and I think you've done this albeit in your own, not quite so articulate way. That can be fixed but a lack of real feeling cannot.

ChrissieJo

16 May 2009

A beautiful poem and straight from the heart which makes it even better!

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I'm an man who takes on many roles. None of which I knew exactly I wanted to do at first. I first started to write. Two years later, I started drawing well. Later I could sing and dance, and many more ... (Read more)

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