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The Raven

By zion613 | Posted: 15 May 2009

Views: 287
Once upon a winter morning, fresh white snow the trees adorning
In my car I contemplated dirty wet slush on the road.
Suddenly, as I was driving, almost as I was arriving
Came a great black raven diving - diving right onto the road
"Goodness me!" I said, "He's dying - dying right upon the road!"
	Thus I write this mournful ode.

There the raven lay, forsaken, on the road that I had taken
In my car I contemplated its limp corpse upon the road.
Each successive day I passed it; sometimes I saw flies amassed it
Each successive day I asked it, "How many cars passed and slowed?
Or did others fly right by, oblivious to what this bode?"
	To me 'tis left to write this ode.

Every day the corpse diminished, 'til one fine spring day 'twas finished
In my car I contemplated the dark stain upon the road
Not a sleek black feather left there; just a darkened spot bereft there
Of its beauty nothing left there, nothing left upon the road.
No remembrance, no marker, nor a wreath beside the road.
	I mark your passing with this ode.
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Comments 
Mr Richard
15 May 2009
I liked this a lot! Sinister yet compasionate.Like the use of older worldy language.
Tilts the cap and winks at Edgar Allen Poe.
poppy101
15 May 2009
Oh this is good it sounds like Edgar Allan Poe's work - It feels very dark and I can imagine it being said by someone with a very deep voice.  I really liked it.
poppy101
15 May 2009
I just want to say I didn't copy Mr Richards comment we must have been writing the same thing at the same time!
Mr Richard
15 May 2009
Doo doo doo doo doo doo doo doo (Supposed to represent the twilight zone tune.)
Shavalarj Hit
16 May 2009
A cracker.

Made my want to write some poetry myself.
Reiner
17 May 2009
So unusual. I just had to give it top marks. I don't know what else to say apart from brilliant.

Reiner.
SalenaRose
17 May 2009
I actually love this so much, especially since pretty much the same thing happened to me but with a blackbird... very emotive yet almost sinister. Gah i have fallen in love with it! And im probably the 10th person to say this but...yes it sounds much like Edgar Allen Poe! :) good work, well done! x
Anonymous
25 May 2009
Can we try harder to be original?  Sounds too much like Edgar Allen Poe's work, The Raven.
zion613
25 May 2009
I make no secret of the fact that this is, indeed, a take-off of Poe's work. His form is so complex and poignant in that poem, that I tried to make an exercise of imitating it. I hope no one else thought I was plagiarizing? If yes, I apologize. Perhaps I should have mentioned it in the post, but I thought it was obvious.

;)
you mimick poe's flow so well. nice!!! i give it 2 thumbs way up!!! 
Quotes the raven "nevermore!!!"
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