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This is very fine. The conflict of anger and the humility of standing back and letting go- and the little snippet of a story like a window into a life. I like it's honesty.
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Great job! I've sometimes felt like this, so the poem speaks to me.
A few points:
'invisable' => invisible
Also, did you mean 'as I silently looked back?' Because the 'she' makes it seem like you're suddenly adding another character, and it's a bit jarring.
Happy writing! ;)
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'she' is another character - the daughter - if this woman leaves her husband she will be wrenching her daughter away from her father and despite the anger of an argument or state of marriage she doesnt deserve to break the magical thread they have together - hence the sacrifice.
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OH! I get it now! For some reason, I thought this was about a girl running away from home. I can't believe I did that! :$
Happy writing! ;)
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Deep, emotional and true to life,we all have to make sacrifices, well done.
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Wonderful! Your writing has a strong, powerful feel to it.
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