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My preference is 'Dusk is the victor' because the words are harsher like a battle. The alternative is also good but its a calmer image, more magestic.
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I agree. " Dusk is the victor" is the victor!
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Thanks, all! I was having a hard time choosing.
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I like the first one better. It has a dissonance in the poem as if, like poppy 101 said, a battle took place between the sunset and night.
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Thank you! That was exactly what I was trying to portray. I really appreciate everyone's comments.
Happy writing! ;)
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Hey zion!
I agree with everyone else- 'dusk is the victor' is the best choice.
audreyhepburn
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To be truthful, I like "Gray Twilight Prevails"
But everyone thinks differently.
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