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I wish I had a power return time back...

By leyla333 | Posted: 15 September 2008

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ME:

Sitting on the bed, looking from the window, feeling empty. I wish it never happened and I am paying for my mistakes. This one was for the life. You are sleeping in my womb and sometimes you kick me too much...I think you will be boy who likes playing football...Lovely to know that you'll arrive on this world in 4 months and we still don't have a place to stay...You know your mum is a looser. With me unemployed and dad quite nowhere you will have certainly bright future...


OUSMAN:

Telephone's ringing. 
Oh no, it's him again! I don't answer. In few seconds text message is coming:
"Hey babe! It's not safe that you stay alone with baby, I would like to be a correct father, I love you so much, buy a bus pass, come to the town and try it with me again"...


ME:

He still don't understand that I don't love him anymore. We were together only two weeks ! Why I was such a stupid and didn't pay attention? It has been 5 months since we broke up. I forgot you forever...
Why I even wrote him that he's the father? I hope that I will not meet him in the town...


ADEM:

You are such a nice guy, so fragile and you don't deserve it. I am feeling so bad about whole thing. If I didn't change the men like the socks it will never happened...Punishment for my promiscuity...
You are deeply hurt I could feel it. I know exactly how much you would like to be a father. You were so lucky that time...Now it's not hi honey, kisses...it's just hi and take care...You are cold and I loose you every day more and more since the day I told you that my scan show that my foetus was created earlier and it is not probably your kid...I cannot be sure for 100% because of my bad memory. I don't remember what happened this day, with who I was with...But I know that it will not be probably yours...I didn't told you but you could read it in my eyes.
You stopped to bring me quality food every weekend, you comes fortnightly, usually in bad mood or too tired to speak to me. And who knows? Maybe you will not be with me anymore in few months.
I am such a surprised that you come back to me after collecting all your staff, telling me that you need a fresh air and runaway in your van. It was rainy this day I  was standing in front of the house, crying, didn't see your van anywhere. I thought  it's over and I'll never see you again. It was the worst day in my life. I was surprised to see you back and I realize that you kind a like me. It's 5 months we are together But you remember everything and you will never forgive me...You are so sad  now...

ME:

I wish I had a power to return the time back...
I've never pray...Does God save me?...
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Comments 
Fredaa
15 September 2008
Hi. This story shows a lot of emotion. I could feel the girl's hurt, anger and confusion. I wanted to reach out and hug her and tell her everything would turn out OK.

Just one thing and it;s a technical thing in the writing. The ADEM confused me. Is it the same man she's talking to or somebody different. I read it twice and couldn't decide. Keep up the good work. You have the makings of a fine, sensitive author.
leyla333
16 September 2008
Actually there's two man in the story, Ousman - her ex-boyfriend and Adem - her new boyfriend.Ousman is the one with who she broke up and wouldn't like to be anymore,even if he has more probability to be biologique father and Adem is a new boyfriend,who tought that is the father but he probably isn't,he's hurt and she wouldn't like to lost him,she loves him too much.
Hope that it's make more sense now.Sorry for a confusion.
Thanks for your comment.

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