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Hi. This story shows a lot of emotion. I could feel the girl's hurt, anger and confusion. I wanted to reach out and hug her and tell her everything would turn out OK.
Just one thing and it;s a technical thing in the writing. The ADEM confused me. Is it the same man she's talking to or somebody different. I read it twice and couldn't decide. Keep up the good work. You have the makings of a fine, sensitive author.
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Actually there's two man in the story, Ousman - her ex-boyfriend and Adem - her new boyfriend.Ousman is the one with who she broke up and wouldn't like to be anymore,even if he has more probability to be biologique father and Adem is a new boyfriend,who tought that is the father but he probably isn't,he's hurt and she wouldn't like to lost him,she loves him too much.
Hope that it's make more sense now.Sorry for a confusion.
Thanks for your comment.
Leyla333
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