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Passover wine

By mlambere | Posted: 03 July 2009

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A Short Poem titled Passover wine 


Silence shattered by squelching goosesteps
Foisty, rotten vermin collides with the burning straw of a Partagas 8-9-8,
Gagging as it tumbled to the hollow engineered floor

Three brown shirted, short back and sides, strutted
And commandeered the stage

"Not many in tonight Landlord"

"Not for a while, it's the smoking, its killing all the locals"
"But. you, yourself are smoking that filthy cigar, how can you condone it?"

"I have a longer term resistance strategy gents"
"Glass of Chablis Sergeant"
"It's from the Halacha Vinyard"

A slurp then a gulp an elbow wiping mouth
" Another, Landlord"
 
An hour passed and the laughter slowly faded as the venom of the bouquet spat
and with that the floor opened
three cold thuds slapped the barrells below.
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Comments 
zion613
05 July 2009
I get that this is about Nazis, but I don't understand much else. This had potential, but you need to make yourself much clearer.

Good luck! ;)
mlambere
05 July 2009
Zion thanks for the feedback it is always appreciated 
the  poem ia actually very simple to understand  I  gues there are a few words you did not recognise so hab outlined them below.  

This is about a Jewish bar owner using drugged wine as part of the fightback against the Nazi's. A partagas 8-9-8 is a type of cigar and creates the atomosphere of a smokey bar in Belguim. Halacha is the way of making kosher wine and the barman would want the germans to know he was Jewish so uses it to represent the Vinyard.

I am revisng this so thanks again  for the feedback
Mr Richard
10 July 2009
Like Zion, I wouldn't have understood it unless it was explained to me - that's due to my own ignorance of the subject matter.After reading it a few times through and in the context of your explanation I can see it's a well thought out ,inteligent piece of work.Very well done.

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