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Another good piece of writing. I enjoyed although perhaps slightly more explanation on what has happened but not revealing all would keep interest and build on where it is. But enjoyable so keep it up.
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Hi,
Your writing is good but I found it a little confusing. Give a little more attention to punctuation and syntax and it will become much clearer. Stick with it you have talent.
Regards
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