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Wow, that almost made me cry! I felt the tears on their way, though!
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I love the fact that you delve into a special child's life. I actually read this through initially without recognizing that there was a rhyming scheme, although I did wonder about certain choices of words. I think some of the lines still need to be adjusted to help form a consistent flow, as some are much longer than others and throw off the rhythm. There are also a few spelling errors: feet, for instance, should be feat (feet are at the end of your ankles, a feat is a challenge).
Lovely concept. A telling piece of work.
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I love your honesty. Reading this, I tried to put myself in her shoes.
You know how I felt, I think she is more blessed than I am. God bless.
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I have critiqued your work as follows -
[First impressions]
I really like this. I have a 5 year old boy, diagnosed with Autism. And i can see him in this. I have tried a few times to write from his perspective, but nothing i have done gives him justice. Thanks you.
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