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Beach

By Strawberry JAM | Posted: 15 September 2009

Views: 246
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Like an oven,
Way too hot,
Like a fan,
Blowing in your face,
Like a fridge,
The water is so cold,
These are the things a beach is like,
Standing on the beach i see these things,
It's not fair,
Her over there,
In her wheelchair,
Not allowed on the beach,
Discrimination taking place,
The beach,
Not as nice as you thought.
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Comments 
bobchoi
15 September 2009
This is the first time I read someone comparing the beach with some kitchen appliances - ha!  They don't really exclude people in wheelchair, do they?  It's just that it's hard to move the wheelchair on the sand, right?
Strawberry JAM
15 September 2009
Yeah, But I was thinking about why they dont have an easy option, I dont understand it
taylorswift97
09 January 2010
This poem doesn't have a very easy flow to it. Especially the last two lines 
It didn't have enough emotion to it to reach me and get me thinking. 
Just some constructive critisism. 
Keep Writing,
taylorswift97
taylorswift97
26 January 2010
And, may I also add, people in wheelchairs are allowed on the heach, or that is what I think. It might just be hard to get through the sand.. 
If they wanted to, I am sure they could go on the beach.
But this is still an interesting poem..

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