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I like this simple, direct declaration of love. There are some careless typos: "your always gentle...", "you find away to kiss.."
There's one line that I have trouble with:
"Cause everyones gossip your love shatters" I know what you mean but it doesn't sound right.
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oh i find it so sweet that you have written something for your husband. you can tell you love him lots. dont worry about little mistakes here and there it's all about writing about something you feel trongly about. you could be the next shakespeare!
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