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you kind of rushed into the action.... but other than that ....the story is okay.
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It isn't going to be very long. I needed to jump into the action early otherwise it would drag on far.
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not nessicarily . you can still build up a better climax. but, yet again , i kinda see what you may be trying to do.... still unsure though....
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hey, here's food for thought... a colt 45 revolter and a walter p 38 are some other western style pistols you could use for your doc holiday type ordeal you've got going on in this piece. also ..he died of teberculosis..so yeah....later
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