Tongue In Cheek
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Kudos 8.38 after 11 votes |
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I draw my tongue across my palm
and watch as velvet drips appear
then look back up to the gallery
and see the backs of empty chairs.
I probe and slash in total random
then curl into the velvet sheet
and wash my mouth with caustic soda
then pop my tongue back in my cheek.
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Kudos 8.38 after 11 votes |
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Comments, critiques and replies
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very good!!!!!!!!!!! | Benclarke [70] | 02/01/2010 |
I am not sure what point you are trying to reach...
And what you are talking about...
This is a bit odd.
taylorswift97 | taylorswift97 [360] | 09/01/2010 |
Taylor is an sarcastic anti emo cutter poem - young people right meanless drivel about the glory and pain
of cutting themselves. This poem is basically saying who care nobodies watching | mlambere [38] | 09/01/2010 |
Hi,
This is the first thing I have read by you but am intrigued to read more! The "I" in the poem
is a convincing voice, mainly I think, in how they describe each new masochistic act in almost ritualistic
terms - the importance of what they do comes through in their not wishing to leave any one thing out.
Some nice imagery too, a sense this person relishes what they are doing. Dark and unnerving. | Keiron [79] | 12/01/2010 |
Not quite sure about this one.
Bye. | audreyhepburn [474] | 20/01/2010 |
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