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Confetti - haiku

By m n m n I | Posted: 14 January 2010

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Thrilled snowflakes schussing
Forgotten tears of spring fresh
Nike's confetti
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Comments 
Grampa Pogi
15 January 2010
MnmnI,

For a NY minute, I thought, this is deep  .... I mean, when snow piles up :-)
BTW, we're enjoying a +2 unseasonal temperature in the middle of January. Springtime.

Cheers.
m n m n I
15 January 2010
Hey, how do you like my first haiku?
I just followed the 5/7/5 in one of your comments in the Circle
You made me think
It was my hardest, so far
The reward was I did it and I came up with the archetype
Nike, the goddess of victory
Didn't intend to be deep as snow in Scarborough
Just reminiscing  
Nike's confetti down Broadway
when the NY Yankees won the World Series
and anticipating all the schussing
if the underdog Jets
win the Super Bowl
Grampa Pogi
15 January 2010
See?  I knew it was deep :-)  How can we deduce all that on three lines of Haiku.

I've always enjoyed your "get-into-my-mind" approach.  It's like, trying to decipher a Picasso painting.  There's a meaning there somewhere, see if the reader can "see" it.  It's like architecture, you either like it or leave it.

Thanks for sharing mnmnI.
m n m n I
16 January 2010
That's what it's all about: sharing the experience
That's what I'm looking for when I read other people's work
What's the experience that the poet is trying to share?
But if you knew Nike only as 
cool name... cool logo... cool shoes . . .
Nothing else? Go jaywalk with Leno
You can bet your sweet s that a lot of thinking was done to come up with them name and logo
They never told you
They want you to look it up
They're haiku poets
Most people probably never even thought of the logo as v for victory
Some call it swoosh
Most people don't know Nike as the goddess of victory
And you can bet your sweets the poet wasn't talking about the shoe
When I read poetry or a novel 
I don't take any of them for granted
You can bet your sweets a lot of thinking was done 
There's a story they want to tell me
I want to hop on the same plane as the writer . . .
Evita Sagalongos
22 January 2010
This is cute, though I miss the point. hehe!

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