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BobChoi,
I learned two new things about your poem. (And if we learn at least one thing a day, imagine, we could learn 365 things in a year. :-)
First, I had to research a poetic 'nonet'. As a musician, I'd heard of nonets as a musical group of nines or as I've found out just today it is also used as a computer term. As a retired system engineer, I've never heard of a nonet used in IT as a group of nine bits but apparently, it is so.
Well, the other thing I learned was this form of poetry. Not only your poem offered a 'staggering' story :-), it followed a particular poetic form. In the past, when I tried to 'understand' poetry, I researched it under 'poetry' and it listed the different forms, Sonnets, Jintishi, Sestina, Villanelle, Pantoum, Rondeau, Tanka, Haiku, Ruba'i, Sijo, Ode, Ghazal, Acrostic, Canzone, Cinquain and other forms like Carmina figurata, Concrete poetry, Fixed verse, Folk song, Free verse, Limerick, Minnesang, Murabba, Pastourelle, Poetry slam . . . and there were two others but they're suspect (being a wiki entry, the entries 'Stev' and 'Yoik' as forms of poetry could be the name of the contributor, Steve York . . . but who knows . . . sorry, I digress).
I got this list from the Wiki guy and if you 'wiki' 'poetry', you'd find no reference to a 'form' in poetry called a 'nonet'. However, if you 'wiki' 'nonet', well, it's there . . . a one-liner . . . a lonely definition that didn't even rate an inclusion with "other forms" of poetry. But it's there.
And with my limited knowhow of poems and poetry in general, I can appreciate the effort you put into this one. It's brilliant.
First line is nine syllables then decreases by one until it reaches the conclusion. Puke!
When I couldn't find 'nonet' first, I thought it would fall under the category of "Concrete poetry" as it adhered to the topic about sidewalks (lol) but now I learned one more thing about poetry.
Your third line appeared having only six syllables if you'd say 'pushed' in one flow, however, since this is poetry in motion, I guess you could pronounce it as 'push-ed' (because he staggered being drunk :-) to make it seven. But who cares, it's still brilliant :-)
BTW . . . the ninth line is also 'Tagalog' in case you want to learn a new international word today. You can research it to make it more fun but, fair warning, don't ask a female if you're within striking distance (unless you wanna get hi-5ed in the face :-)
Cheers,
Grampa
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