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The Best Laid Schemes

By iram 24 | Posted: 25 January 2010

Views: 249
Well planned schemes can often fail,
The sweeter they seem in the marvelling mind
The more the spirit is staggered, 
When they appear in reality as bitter and stale.

Prying humans tussle from one lonely path to the other,
The journey only ending in dissatisfaction.
The now weakened heart drowns in sorrow,
Betrayed by passengers seated beside them as friends.

Weaved are our futures from the moment of our birth,
To the forlorn hour of our deaths.
Battle and sacrifice aren't defined to us at a premature age,
For our minds are too infantile to see beyond the fairytale dream.

Yet the best laid schemes of us humans, 
And animals alike;
Are scattered on the pathway through our long travels,
Where other dead dreams and belief in faith,
Lounge like corpses beneath heavy gravestones.
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Comments 
JD Higginson
26 January 2010
Very emotive and well written.

Good job.

JD
bobchoi
27 January 2010
"Man proposes: God disposes".   Iram, I appreciate the theme of this piece and you executed it with emotion and styler.  Very good work!

If I may nickpick, in the last stanza, "And animals alike"  seems a bit out of place.  Animals don't make plans, do they?   Is that line needed?
iram 24
27 January 2010
Thank you so much, its proper sweet of you. 
I believe that animals like us humans make plans for their future too. Maybe not plans about what they are going to do for the rest of their lives but they make plans about certain events in their lives, like a female penguin looks after and cares for its unborn child. A penguin couple travels such long distances so the mother can give birth and the child can be safe. The father penguin then travels double the length again so he can get the food he had stored for the mother and new born penguin.
debbie reynolds
27 January 2010
Very well written it tells a story from the begining to 'best laid plans' which we all have done and maybe achieved, some not, as for the animals they seem to have a scheme ll of their own. Good work.
Evita Sagalongos
28 January 2010
Good poem, but some lines are too long and stanzas are not uniform.
iram 24
28 January 2010
I'm still working on that.

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