song to the anonymous by Gnomie

You're like a disease
Eating me alive.

You wore me out, 
and now you're coming for more.

There something untold,
and now lets watch it unfold.

I hope you choke,
I hope she breaks you down.
I hope you fall apart, 
I will tare your little world apart.

So to all your words, to all your lies.
I'm not gonna be the one who cries.

I hope you choke,
I hope she breaks you down.
I hope you fall apart, 
I will tare your little world apart.

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Comments

Grampa Pogi

27 January 2010

Hi Gnomie,

Welcome to the circle.

This is freakin' awesome.  That's telling him, huh!  

When I got to the word 'tare' I went searching.  And then I thought, 'nice'  . . . it means,  the act of decomposing a substance into its constituent elements . . . now, that is heavy.  And that's REALLY putting a curse on someone, albeit poetically.

And the best part was, I learned a new word, too :-). 

(Just a little tweaking on quotation marks . . . "There's something or there is something (?) and let's or let us (?)"  . . . but overall, it's excellent.)

Grampa

churchmouse

27 January 2010

Welcome to the circle Gnomie, None of us are famous, I don't think that any of us are rich, but we are all getting better at this writing thing, and one day eh!

Evita Sagalongos

28 January 2010

I like this song, i wish I could hear it played in the radio someday =)

wolfeyesofgoldenrays

06 February 2010

hey girl1 aren't you glad i got you to join writers circle? i love you r poem . it is deep and dark. good work.
wolfy

Also see: How do i know what i write is good? (devsimz) • is this wise? (wolfeyesofgoldenrays) • Just me! (NoelLynn) • In My Spare Time (Evita Sagalongos) • This is Life.. (Booba88) • I am Vici (IamVici) • Haiti Earthquake (audreyhepburn) • Madame Noblay (churchmouse) • london born but irish heart. (marygrace) • To evakaye re twins at a funeral (m n m n I)

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