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I really like this one.
Audrey
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Taylor...I really like this. I think all of your verses are great. I do see one verse where the rhythm and flow is slightly off. Could I be so bold as to make a suggestion? In verse 2, changing the 2nd and 3rd lines to read: "Wind blowing through my hair... My lover gently holding my hand". I think it improves the rhythm and personalizes it more too. Thanks for indulging me.
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thanks audrey, and thanks unbridledspirit for your suggestion! I will definetly fix that.
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