Kudos 4.25 after 5 votes |
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A man traces the outline of her face.
His only photograph.
Longing.
A woman dreams about her son.
He died before he was born.
Longing.
A child hugs her knees.
Her best friend has moved away.
Longing.
An elderly man calls out to his wife.
He can't remember that she passed away 12 years ago.
Longing.
A little boy stares out his hospital window.
He will never be able to run, to play.
Longing.
A homeless family stares in the window of a shop.
Another family is buying a large-screen television.
Longing.
Kudos 4.25 after 5 votes |
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Comments, critiques and replies
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this piece is deep and moving. great job | taylorswift97 [365] | 03/02/2010 |
Thanks. I wanted it to be a little like "As the Sun Sets" but different.
Audrey | audreyhepburn [467] | 04/02/2010 |
effecting ones feelings with emotions that release thoughts of despair great poem
mature gent
p.s. thank you for your coments on my work I enjoy writing now retired but admire your talent and wish
you well. | mature gent [110] | 07/02/2010 |
Thanks!
Audrey | audreyhepburn [467] | 07/02/2010 |
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