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Canned laughter rings out
turtle neck periscopes,
to glimpse the magic lanterns variety show.
The herring wept
as he fell off the unicycle
for the sixth time.
Point taken
she said
feeling for the wetwipes
then woodbines.
No longer the cowgirl
in nylons, writhing
thrown over for kippers instead.
http://markolambo.weebly.com
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Malambere, interesting piece....hmmm... let me be the first to admit that I have no idea what this poem
is about. It carries a sexual content warning so I tried hard looking at it from all the possible angles,
but still come up empty! Maybe I'm just getting too old. Would Grampa please take a stab at it... you're
always good at figuring out this sort of things! | bobchoi [488] | 04/02/2010 |
Bob, it is sureal but if u look at my website I have explained it
http://markolambo.weebly.com
let me know if you are still struggling...it is about sex and rejection | mlambere [38] | 04/02/2010 |
Graphic, mlambere
turtle neck periscopes = maybe I know this one
magic lantern variety show = the action?
herrings wept = maybe I know this one
he fell off the unicycle = oh, no?
wetwipes
woodbines = it's a cigarette, still symbolic
cowgirl in nylons, writhing
kippers = disappointment?
A lot of tubes and fish
You should post this in Youtube
A lot of imagination | m n m n I [365] | 04/02/2010 |
Thanks M N M its not an easy oneto get but when you do hopefully it tickles the taste buds...check ut
my website and hope everything becomes clear. I liked your feedback its apprecaited | mlambere [38] | 04/02/2010 |
OK, Mark. I visited your blog. It's neat. You've done a great job with it. Now, even with your explanation,
I still needed to stretch to visualize the fine points in this poem. Solving riddles like this might
indeed prevent the onset of Alzheimer's. For that I thank you! | bobchoi [488] | 05/02/2010 |
Mlambere,
If you got BobChoi and M n m n I stumped, I'd say hats off to you. :-) I'd like to take a stab at it
like BobChoi suggested but I'm quite lukewarm when it comes to deep poetry (or any type of poetry) only
because I cannot write a good poem let alone comment on one. I haven't checked your blogsite yet so just
bear with me.
The wetwipes and then the woodbines . . . cigarette after sex (I think).
Turtleneck periscopes . . . uncircumcised?
That's all I could come up with when it comes to the sexual content.
Now for the 'fishy' reference (kippers, herring), how should I put it.
Okay, . . . the wife asked the husband to go to Blockbuster (movie rentals) and borrow a movie called
'Scent of a Woman'. He told the clerk casually he would like to rent the movie about a scent of a woman.
He got home and gave his wife "A Fish called Wanda".
Grampa Pogi | Grampa Pogi [547] | 05/02/2010 |
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