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M n m n I,
Incredibly simple yet profound in its meaning.
This is great . . . I'm seeing a series in the making :
Where Love Is
Who Love Is
Is This Love
What Love Is
. . . next in line would be
When Love Is
and then
Why Love Is . . .
. . . it's your turn Possum :-)
Grampa
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Thank you, Grampa Pogi
Just finished revising the poem
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I like it, you're a believer of love. I want to print it for decor and put your initials with it, of course with your permission. But one thing, I would like to comment on the line "You pay as you go" this must be coherent from the previous and succeeding lines, as I find the poem smooth flowing except to this line.
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You pay as you go , , , The long stem rose has thorns . . .
"You pay as you go" actually balances with "Love exacts a price"
in form; and answers the question with the absolute truth that one can't escape
"Pay as you go" is an expression in a way opposite to "fly now pay later"
In love, you've got to take the pleasure with the pain
Love is priceless but love makes sure you don't take it for granted; so therefore love exacts a price
The long stem rose has thorns . . .
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All y'all
I've tweaked the poem 'What Love Is'
The latest version is posted and ready for Valentine's
I would appreciate your comments
m n m n I
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