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The Blue Folder - Twenty

By Grampa Pogi | Posted: 07 February 2010

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TWENTY



Port Blair Briefing
Andaman Islands, India



	The gang was all smiles, jeering and cheering when Joe Hernandez entered the hotel's convention floor. Wolf-whistles echoed and table poundings succeeded as if Joe had won the Boston Marathon. An arm crossed his tummy, took a bow, glanced at the girls to see their reaction, peeked at his watch and took a seat. 8:30 AM. Tiamo and Megan were giggly - making silly faces. A few minutes later, Bernie strolled in and greeted everyone. He was so delighted everyone was safe after the harrowing incident. At five to nine, Ron and Sonny Boy sauntered in amidst more applause from everybody, including Gruff. Ron took a beeline to Gruff, shook his hand and thanked him for saving his life. It was the first time Ron experienced something he hadn't seen in the immediate past - a smiling Gruff. Other agents joined in to congratulate Ron's quick recovery.

	"Our mission is blown as far as the Nigerians are concerned. Intel analysts intercepted some chatter from Nigeria. Apparently, the Prince had alerted authorities in Lagos to watch for us.  You have to come in via EG. I've alerted our friends at Malabo as well as those in Yaoundé, Cameroon in case we gonna need them. Bulastog's Squirrel will drop in to take you to the yacht. I can't stress enough the need to maintain absolute silence and as usual, 'a need-to-know-intel basis' would strictly be followed. Once on-board 'Boysie's Dream', her tender will ferry you ashore to Lagos en-route to your final destination; that would only be relayed when you get there. Although the Nigerian authorities have no clue where our agents might be staying, Azizi somehow managed to sniff it from us at the hangar in Hong Kong. I'm not sure if Azizi has contact with the Prince, however, to err on the safe side, Bob Loblaw had been alerted and on the move. He's staying at a safe house near Ikoyi, managed by our Aussie brethren and will meet you later at another safe house. Any questions?"
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Comments 
churchmouse
08 February 2010
Hi Grampa Pogi, Comments rather than critiques for this chapter. I thought that this flowed very well. I read it three times but could find neither any obvious faults, nor any dialogue that sat uneasily with me. 
I have no idea what the story is about, having only read chapters 18, 19 and Twenty and so will search back through the archives over the next few days, so that I have a better idea of what I'm talking about. but for now as far as I can see, all go's well for the good ship Blue Folder
Grampa Pogi
08 February 2010
Thanks for your comments Churchmouse,

I'm working on a proper 'summary' and or synopsis.  I've got the whole story down I just have to type it with my two fingers (one, if I hold the shift key with the other).  I'll post it later . . . there's a lot of twists and turns that reading what I've posted on WC would give you some kind of background and characterizations, but the end result might not be too obvious.

The summary is the hardest to do (for me).  This is the part that would be printed at the back of the book or inside the flaps that would separate a reader from his money. It's the part you want to encourage a sale and yet you don't want to ruin the plot for them . . . some kind of a teaser.

Grampa Pogi
Evita Sagalongos
09 February 2010
Grampa Pogi, 

One thing I learned from doing a summary is that you share the climax but you don't share everything (meaning, it's for the readers to find out).  Yes, the synopsis will really help us.
Grampa Pogi
09 February 2010
Hi Evita,

I'm still new to this that's why it's really hard.  When I wrote my first one, it didn't pass the editor's nod and was massaged by the publisher's editors (after they'd gone through the whole book) to what it turned out to be for the final print.  If you get a chance, it's printed on my website and there's not even a hint of anything about the climax (just like a trailer for a movie).  Maybe I'm using the wrong terminology.  Maybe just a "summary" and not a "synopsis" (but then, the dictionary defines it as 'A brief outline or general view, as of a subject or written work; an abstract or a summary') and this is what I need to do without showing a climax.  This is why it is such a struggle to come up with a summary that would give some overall scenario but not giving up and ruining the end.

Thanks for your input.

Grampa
Evita Sagalongos
09 February 2010
Hi Grampa, 

Yes synopsis and summary are two different things, the synopsis is in the front part of the book while the summary is in the back part of the book.  In some books I read, they do put an open ended climax in the summary, in synopsis there is none, it's more of overview if I am not mistaken.  The back part is really the selling tool (aside from the name, in case of some authors).
m n m n I
16 February 2010
The morning after
the smell fishy
Well written, Grampa Pogi
Grampa Pogi
16 February 2010
Thanks MnmnI,

Indeed the morning after smelled fishy but Joe, did, brush his teeth. :-)

I'm posting the next chapter soon.


(Warning, if you're squeamish about sex jokes, don't read past this.)

BTW, overheard at 'Fourbucks' recently :

[Dick]    Have you tried the 'rodeo' position yet?
[Prick]   Haven't heard. What is it ?
[Dick]    Get your girl on all fours and mount her from behind.  Then reach over and cup her squeezeboxes, hang on tight,  then whisper, "gee, these feels like your sister's".  Then you try and stay on for 8 seconds.

( I warned you, didn't I?  :-)

Grampa

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