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Not easy this erotic writing lark, eh Bobchoi. I wrote a manuscript of a novel, and one of the chapters was a wedding night with a virgin bride. I found that It was one of the most difficult chapters to write, and it ended up being more comic than erotic.
Possibly it may be a natural desire not to stray into vulgarity, but I think that with erotic writing one must concentrate more on description than story where normally it's the other way round.
Any-way I thought that your's was pretty good.
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BobChoi,
Where could we get this "The Book of Heavens"? Sounds very interesting.
Reminds me of a priest during communion and the reply of the recipient after receiving the bread.
[P] "Body of Christ"
[R]"Amen"
[P] "Body of Christ"
[R]"Amen"
[P] "Body of Christ"
[R]"Amen"
. . . then a gorgeous looking lady stepped up . . . the priest stopped momentarily . . .
[P] "Christ, what a body"
. . . the whole congregation answered
"AMEN!"
Sorry not to offend the religious ones . . . just a joke. :-)
This is actually a good beginning for a novel. You should expound on it and see what you could do for her as you did for Jenny.
Grampa
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<<< Imagine what I can do for someone like Julie... >>>
And get paid for it!
You're pimpin', bobchoi ( : and that's a compliment : )
Can't wait for Ch 2!
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Hi Bobchoi, if your purpose is to make the story erotic, i think you need to do more. Honestly, I find it funny... (from female's perspective). You know Bob, the actors internalize when they find that the character they will be portraying is so different from who they are. I think that is one of the techniques you can use to make the story more erotic.
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OK, folks, I got the message. Really, I'm not the erotic type... I'm still struggling with being romantic! I can be funny though, but that doesn't help much when I'm trying to get my readers aroused sexually. I need to get back to the drawing board or put it on the back burner! Sobs!
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Say it ain't so, bobchoi
Just when I'm beginning to imagine what you can do for someone like Julie
You might just be the next Woody Allen
Funny, romantic, erotic
Don't know how he gets away with it with his looks
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MnmnI,
I think the *Sobs* in the end was a *tongue-in-?* and could mean *you son of a bees* :-)
Okay, I was just kidding BobChoi, please put away the flamethrower.
;-)
Grampa
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