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Response/ Question to Chrissiejo

By stargazer | Posted: 19 February 2010

Views: 192
I'm always interested in feedback. I have to ask if you read both submissions of chapter 2 prior to reading this half of chapter three. It addresses both going back to the hotel and showering...
If indeed you did, then I will definitely try to look at it from a different angle. If not, see if you still hve that reaction after you do. Thanks! Stargazer
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ChrissieJo
19 February 2010
I'll have a read and let you know how I get on. Cheers
ChrissieJo
26 February 2010
Thanks Stargazer. I have had a read like you suggested. Your writing is super and you have put in a lot of hard work into this. Quite comendable. Tone things down a bit, ie give a little more space to let the prose flow before each new erotic encounter. I'd like to see you challenge you characters a bit more that you are doing at present. From the way you write, I have the feeling you can do that very well. 

Good luck!

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