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Leviathan Chapter 1: Dawn (Longer/Revised 2)

By Dorian | Posted: 21 February 2010

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Have you ever.
	.Woken from a dream, a state of consciousness so similar to reality as to render the two realms practically indiscernible. As the world conjured within the confines of your skull expands at incomprehensible pace into the world beyond your eyes, you flicker between what stands before you, and the lingering reverie of your sub-conscious imaginings: grasping at the edges of soft thin memories in the hope of clinging on to some solid sensible image. Your sensory reconnaissance faculties; scouring the concrete world for sense data and relaying it to your mind, conjuring fleeting images from the blooming, buzzing confusion around. The mind slowly awakens to its responsibilities, shaking off the settled night dust and stretching its languorous cognitive limbs, in preparation for its perpetual task of interpreting the phenomenal world. 
Underneath your body your skin presses against the soft green grass; the sweet, smell of early morning dew, washing the pungent aromas of natures morning into one intoxicating miasma and permeating your olfactory consciousness. Vibrant oranges and yellows bear down upon your sensitive eyes, forcing them open to a squint as the morning sun, slowly revealing itself to the slumbering half of the world, scorches your fragile, confused eyes: eyes accustomed to darkness, shocked by the pain of mornings brightness. You roll your head to one side to hide your sensitive face from the intensity of the sun; the dew-laden grass beneath you brushes against your lips, wetting the dry splits. Running your tongue around the bone-dry, cracked lips, you recognise the taste of blood: salty, dry, metallic. The sun, slowly progressing to its midday resting place, makes you evermore aware of the cold damp earth beneath you and a chilling paroxysm grips your fragile, confused body.

Out in a field, sunlight slowly tripping and spilling over the tufty hillocks of moss and sporadic patches of scrubland grass, lay a body. It had lain for maybe two or three of the sun's glorious arcs, so the skin was parched and cracked. Dust, grass and shingle, the body's bed: the hard earth, a most unwelcome resting place, an unpleasant waking would follow this last of the stretching shadows. The body, stiff, cold and anonymous slowly bent at the waist and raised its sleep-sodden head. The torso and face bore untraceable scrapes and bruises, reflected in the countenance, wincing at each burning ache that accompanied even the most delicate muscle movement. Lengths of dark brown hair jutted and flowed without regularity, faint remnants of a parting suggested that the unkempt style was once neatly partitioned; the body bore no resemblance to civility now. Blurred shapes, colours, outlines, are all one, an immeasurable mass of sense data, filtering through the receptors and falling, falling, falling onto the hard exterior of the brain as if the tightly furrowed, pensive brow were clenching the very muscles of rational thought: the data cannot be categorised, nothing can make sense, our innate concept of unity means nothing if reason cannot divulge sense from our surroundings. 

The head turned stiffly from side to side, slowly, surveying its surroundings, each movements reciprocity, an agony of aches, burns and arid, grinding bones, as if the very joints had been scorched dry by the intensity of the sun: now at mid arc, intense and unforgiving. It had taken the best part of the morning for the body to gradually inch its way upwards into a stable vertical position and it now stood, swaying uneasily in the light breeze. Turning its gaze inwards, the body took stock of its own condition. Though the body was evidently damaged, the lacerations and bruises appeared not to be the greatest source of discomfort, in fact, they resembled little more than scrapes and bumps. Yet, even the slightest movement was enough to prevent its thoughts stretching beyond kinaesthesia. Untraceable discomfort is undeniably a cause for concern, in most cases that is, however, the disillusionment of such sensory ambiguity offered in this particular scenario simply added to the sense of utter disembodiment felt by the upright figure: deceived by his senses beyond any logical reconciliation. Overwhelmed by unbearable pain and confusion, the body collapsed to its familiar resting place with a sudden uncanny limpness. In a futile attempt to protect its head from the unforgiving earth the body struck out an arm in a gentle protective curve. The attempt had little effect as the head, removed of the support of its weak neck thudded against the hard soil and stones that lay compacted beneath the grass. The guardian arm, now draped listlessly across the face, bore to the dull, rheumy eyes its naked wrist, upon which, in passing glimpses between intermittent lapsing consciousnesses, the eyes noticed several marks, engraved in ink much like a tattoo but with the drab artlessness of a barcode or registration code - 0-0-1 T-A-V-I-A - L-E-H-N. The characters blurred and the mind slipped back into darkness.

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Comments 
stargazer
21 February 2010
Hi Dorian.
You have an incredible gift. You can project guided imagery or visions onto paper. And do so with words that come together to form visuals that others can see in their minds. To me that means you are intricately aware of yourself and your surrounding. Very few people can do this and do it well. I personally struggle with settings when I write. stargazer
Dorian
21 February 2010
Thank you stargazer. As far as i can tell, my awareness to the world around me comes from a considerable time spent in my own head. I spend a lot of time writing things in my imagination, conversing with myself in cognitive prose. I try my best when i can to convey direct experiences into words. I feel that writing isnt just about putting down everything you see and experience as that usually constitutes little more than descriptive chronology; i feel that to truely convey an experience, you must discern between necessary and supurfluous elements of the experience and discriminate rigidly against those parts of the overall sense of the moment that are not directly relevant. This allows for subjective detail to enter into the description and a more intricate, character personal image can be created. 

Thats my two cents anyway, just a thought, hope it is helpful
Anonymous
21 February 2010
Isn't Leviathan the title of a book written by Scott Westerfeld????

I'll go check...

Hmmm... it is.  Odd coincidence...
m n m n I
22 February 2010
Here we are indulged and replete in the bliss of sensation and reflection of John Locke's philosophy; and then merging and juxtaposing with the Hobbesian experience of pain . . .

Brilliant writing
Hopefully not becoming too esoteric

Is this going to be about the holocaust?
Dorian
22 February 2010
To anonymous: yes indeed this is titled identically to the sci-fi novel published by Scott Westerfield however, my temporary (and i stress temporary) title is pertaining to the treatise on human nature and the socil contract written by the English philosopher Thomas Hobbes: in which he refers to the necessity of a large and powerful sovereign leader (a leviathon) to govern the state and protect society from slipping back into the 'nasty, brutish and short life of the state of nature.
Dorian
22 February 2010
Thanks m n m n l. 

It shouldnt be to esoteric, i intend to appeal to interpretable views of human nature with the established philosophical positions as sounding boards. And no it is not about the holocaust, it is to be an attempt at a fictionally tangible Social Contract Theory whereby the Hypothetical State of Nature is brought into reality.

I hope you enjoyed reading so far.
bobchoi
22 February 2010
Alright, folks, stop asking any more questions, and let the man gets back to his writing... you're spoiling all the fun!  Ha!
Dorian
22 February 2010
m n m n l. Just wondering whether you have yet perceived the anagramatical significance of the chaaracter's name?
m n m n I
22 February 2010
You got me there, Dorian

Just brushed upon it
getting ahead of myself
jumping to the holocaust concept
The letters in the anagram should have tipped me off
I see the binary beginning 001
and LEVIATHAN!

With your precocity 
I hope you're not getting gray fast or getting bald
and  living every moment of youth
IamVici
23 February 2010
Beautiful writing, Dorian.
I think you should keep the title. Or something like Leviathan According to Dorian (great name for a character). Or Leviathan Coming. Or Leviathan Untamed.
Dorian
25 February 2010
Thanks guys. No dont worry m n m n l i have hair long enough to tie back and it is thick and dark, no worries of balding or greyness haha. 

Thank you 'Iamvici' i am not sure whether the title is too explicit or whether it will yet remain relevant to the whole novel, i do like it quite a lot though. Very powerful image. Might siound a bit sci-fi ish though
m n m n I
25 February 2010
If you ask me, Dorian
Keep the title
Perhaps like 'Leviathan Unleashed' or 'Leviathan Unbound'
or just 'The Leviathan' as Hobbes titled it
I think the name is as old as Jewish history
The image hides deep in our psyche and haunts us in our dreams
Transforming like DNA
From the biblical and myth to an archetype 
just like the characters (and monsters) in Greek mythology; and the bible
From an allegory to a symbol
From mental consciousness to metaphysical and spiritual consciousness
Having a life of its own

But of course, it's your call
How about Moby Dick?  :=)
m n m n I
25 February 2010
Hey, you might just be Hobbes in your former life
wanting to write a novel then
but he could only do so much in one lifetime :=)
Dorian
25 February 2010
An interesting proposition m n m n l,  though im still developing my own perspective on human nature at present and as such am unsure exactly which social contract theorist i will likely parallel, i find my natural instinct drifting more towards a cultural relativist/rousseauesque interpretation;  find Hobbes a bit cynical and narrow minded.
m n m n I
26 February 2010
You've got multifarious perspectives, Dorian
And they can all happen at the same time
From my perspective, you have so many novels in the making
just exploring one philosophical perspective at a time
Or as I said above, letting all happen at the same time, 
then inevitably colliding
See what philosophy prevails

Just keep on writing 
and see where the angles lead you 
I've got the feeling you'd be set for life . . .
Dorian
05 March 2010
Thank you m n m n l. I like the thought of developing a concept over a long period of time. However, i also am attracted to writing about current events, the zeitgeist etc in  quasi-allagorical way.

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Dorian

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