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Leviathan Prologue: Red Sky At Night

By Dorian | Posted: 21 February 2010

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Violence
Violence
October 17th 2010: Washington DC - 

One footstep: a silent thud, a murmurous echo; too insignificant a notion of sound to raise alarm in the blooming, buzzing metropolis of Washington DC. 10 000 footsteps, a clamorous roar, an impending drumbeat echoing in the very foundations of the city: the feet of it's inhabitants, the city's living breathing heartbeat sounding the meter of their march. Left, right, left, right, lift, stomp, scuff, and pound: pound the message into the streets, the marchers's explicit refrain. 

***

The thumb, pressed tight against the wound; the wound too wide for the thumb; the thumb unable to prevent, the fervour of coursing blood; the blood that spills onto the sheets; the sheets that were so clean. The purity of the institution enforced globally to uphold freedom and liberty and universal rights, inaliable; god given or not. Demos, the people, the philosopher king, all put in place to offer one thing; sanctity from oppression and means to live life; and safety form the reds and their thirst for civil strife. But the blood on the sheets, now trodden in by feet, into the grain of the street; the blood of the people, from the hearts of the free, is spilled for good cause: to replace the absentee. 

***

This refrain was printed a thousand times over, and was emboldened and bordered and held aloft, a thousand times over: replace the absentee. The footsteps rumbling like an approaching wave, the sound bouncing from the concrete formations that framed the street sending reverberating sprays of foaming echo over the torrential march below. The colossal wave would soon reach the isolated islands of the city upon which it would converge: submerging the institutions that had for so long held the lapping waves of the gentle tide at bay. 

***

Uniform matching uniform, the stoic foot-soldiers, sprung up onto the metal rung support step of the personnel carrier flinging in their weapons and bergens; the remaining few, scurrying fast to keep up with the pace of the already deploying vehicle: all were prepared for a hasty alight. Uniform marching echoed the booming monotony of synchronised steps, the peoples's advance: the workers's frontier. Soon they would meet, not on welcome terms, bullets make light work of human flesh. The thundering stampede met silence at last, outside the institutions: to shatter the glass. Violence ensued, this was no peaceful demonstration, gone was the time of bargaining and negotiations, the walls must be destroyed, the festering malignance sterilized: the fruitful blossom of the new shall bring a red morrow. Money is a powerful tool, more powerful than muscle, or bone or mass presence. Money buys guns, guns fire bullets, bullets kill people. 

Bullets tear the very flesh of society from the skeleton structure that lingers: evermore the deteriorating remnants of human nature.

***
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Comments 
bobchoi
21 February 2010
You know, Dorian, I enjoyed reading your poems, very much... but your free prose threw me off a bit, I often felt it was "sensory overload"... but this prologue... If I read it like I would with a poem, then it all started to make sense.  Hmmm, I believe I'm getting used to your writing style... at last.
Dorian
21 February 2010
Thanks Bobchoi. I know my writing is a little off piste. It may be that i adopt this style permanently, but as of now i am still finding my feet in the field of writing. In all i have only been writing a few months. However, what has provided me with what i would imagine is a considerable amount of creative experience is my own personality. I wouldn't go so far as to say that i am a misanthropist, however, my propensity to sit pensively and watch the world continue, almost nonchalant to my presence often gives me a certain sense of satisfaction. Through much silence and considerable thought i have developed my writing style in my head. Now, much lie unpacking a bag, i am beginning to pour out and arrange my thoughts, imaginings, styles and developments onto paper. It may take a while to get used to this new form and sort it accordingly but i hope that eventually i will be be to develop my own independent style. 

I hope that you recognised the meter in the prologue. It is supposed to reflect in rhythm the confusion and chaotic fervor of a mass demonstration.
m n m n I
21 February 2010
Man in the state of nature is "nasty, brutish and short" - Thomas Hobbes
This wasn't your prologue before, which I thought was also a philosophical approach
This Prologue tells us this is war and that this is going to be nasty, brutish and short  as the title Leviathan also suggests
I could be wrong

Beautifully written

You're deep, Dorian
Can't wait to flip the pages . . .

PS  I like the philosophical approach for the prologue; much like what I do with architectural design as the first step in the design process
Dorian
22 February 2010
Thanks again m n m n l. This will hopefully be expanded upon soon.
Dorian
22 February 2010
P.S. life in the state of nature would be 'Solemn, poore, nasty, brutish and short' - Thomas Hobbes

haha full quote
m n m n I
22 February 2010
Yeah, I noticed that when I read the beginning of my commet in the New section
I said man instead of life
I knew someone would correct me
and I hoped it would be you
Thanks
IamVici
23 February 2010
Prophetic, Dorian. Unless something's done in DC right now!
Dorian
25 February 2010
that is interesting to hear 'Iamvici' are you from washington yourself? it would be really useful if you could update me on the relevance of my work as i upload. It would be great if my work in some way aralleled the zeitgeist of it's setting (in reality).
IamVici
26 February 2010
I thought I was going to DC at the end of last year, but I had a better offer in NY, so I took the job. Like most of us, I get info from the internet or media. The politics in DC right now is nasty and brutish.

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