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Jellybeans

By GenieRaine | Posted: 22 February 2010

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Kathy arrived home clutching her prize. It wasn't much, just a ridiculously large jar filled with jellybeans. But then again, she still won. She hadn't won anything in her life. Holding the jar against her breasts, she stepped over every crack on the path leading up to the front door. Fumbling with the doorknob, she rammed it open. "I'm home! I'm home! Dad! You'll never guess...". With joy still coursing through her, Kathy spun into every room of the townhouse, wanting to see her father's face wrinkle with pride. She froze in the middle of the stainless steel kitchen. The sharp, metal smell now foreign to her. Realisation shuddered her back into motion. "I forgot, you're not here anymore", she sighed defeatedly. Checking her wallet, she fished for her last twenty dollars. Just enough for a one-way cab ride.

       Stepping out of the taxi and trudging through the automatic doors, just like she had every day for two years, Kathy still held on for dear life to the jar of jellybeans. She marched right on past Reception. She knew exactly where to go.

       She walked into the room where they kept her father, her school shoes squeaking on the newly-waxed linoleum. She stood at the end of the bed, mesmerised by the slight rise-and-fall of her daddy's chest. The monitor beeped a steady rhythm, a backbeat to the pounding of her heart in its white cage. "D-Daddy...", she murmured, her voice shaking, the jellybeans rattling in her shaking hands. She slid into the armchair facing the bed, legs and arms filled with grace, eyes filled with tears. "Daddy...", Kathy said again, clear and true. "I won this jar of jellybeans". She laughed. "Yeah, it's stupid, I know. But I won. Just me, no one else. Isn't that something?".

       Several minutes passed. Then an hour. She got up to leave, crying silently and freely now. "Well, I'll see you tomorrow, Daddy. And the next day, and the next day...", her voice cracking.
       Turning towards the door, she did a double-take. His mouth twitched ever so quickly, a shooting star. Then, as if he had never been comatose, his face wrinkled with pride. With the breathing tube still in his throat, his voice a blessing on her ears, he whispered, "Kathy ... you hate jellybeans".
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Comments 
ChrissieJo
22 February 2010
A heart warming story. Great ending, especially the suspense that waited until the last paragraph!
Possum
22 February 2010
It's beautiful.  I love it.
bobchoi
22 February 2010
A most touching little story with a BIG heart!  Just wondering, how about if it ends differently:  "Kathy... don't go... I love jellybeans!"  He!He!
ChrissieJo
22 February 2010
You have a great sense of humor Bobchoi!... Either way, this story is lovely.
Grampa Pogi
22 February 2010
GenieRaine,

What a great story with a wonderfully funny twist for an ending.  I think Churchmouse will now have competition ;-).

:-)
Grampa
GenieRaine
23 February 2010
Haha, thank you all for your comments (:
churchmouse
23 February 2010
What a super little story Genieraine. I thought that it was excellent.
audreyhepburn
25 February 2010
That's good.  Short and very SWEET =)

Very heartwarming, a great story.  Keep it up!
GenieRaine
26 February 2010
Thank you <3
m n m n I
26 February 2010
This story is Socratic in that it shows 
how little we know about ourselves
But if we know how little we know
then we'd know more about ourselves
Jelly beans would do the trick, too . . .

Good work, GenieRaine

--mnmnI
taylorswift97
12 March 2010
This is so sweet! I LOVED THIS! Fantastic
Prossey
13 March 2010
Short but excellent.  Keep it up!

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