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Very well conveyed. It is terse, with no redundancy. The only thing I'm a bit unsure about is wind - rushing through the towns. Everything else is gentle, barely perceptible. The rushing bit seems a bit incongruous. Perhaps zehpyr or breeze rather than wind; or something to do with aspens (e.g. aspens trembling - which would link in with ghost maybe...)
My humble opinion only. I think it's a fine poem as it is!
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