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Wake up at seven, cursing the world,
Throw on some trousers, a shirt and a tie,
Call to my wife to see if she's up,
But she is as dead to the world as I.
Pour a black coffee, switch on the news,
Showing a car overturned in a ditch,
Face of a schoolgirl, smiling with joy,
Missing or murdered; I don't catch which.
Slurp down my coffee, dash out the door,
Hurry through streets paved with yesterday's trash,
Cross past the subway, avoiding the tramp,
And race to the bank to draw out some cash.
Get to the office, quarter to nine,
The morning drags by like it's a year long,
Dream away throughout a dull meeting,
Wonder exactly where my life went wrong.
Every morning plays out the same,
Everyone dances to this sombre beat.
And so I trudge down a well worn path,
A pattern that man is cursed to repeat.
-Written 15/06/09
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As a man who had worked behind a desk for 30 odd years, I can certainly relate to this theme. It flows very nicely. But why the title of Groundhog Day? It's "Just Another Working Day", isn't it?
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I actually called it 'Groundhog Day' after the 1993 film of the same name starring Bill Murray, in which a man find himself repeating the same day over and over again. I felt the title was appropriate because many of us can end up feeling as we are caught in the same kind of cycle of repeating a day over and over again because of a dull job or an unfullfilled life.
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This one was interesting. I'm not really sure about the flow. There was something about the rhyming. It was there sometimes, but then it wasn't, If you know what I mean. There wasn't really a solid pattern, so I think that made that flow a little akward in parts. A few of the lines seem like too many words are squeezed in. I think that this would be good if you did a bit of polishing up with it.
Keep on writing
Taylor
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Boston, UNITED KINGDOM
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I'm a writer, hippie, artist, vegetarian, eternal student, daydreamer, animal-lover, philosopher, bookworm, dancer, idealist and lover of life. I enjoy writing poetry, short stories, articles and ... (Read more)
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