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Partial rewrite of Chapter 4 of Cuffs, Lies and Fantasy Rides.
By
stargazer
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28 February 2010
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The knowledge that I had to many sexual encounters between the H and H in this chapter had been tip toeing around in the back of my head for several days now. It wasn't motivated well enough. Chrissiejo picked up on this and kindly brought it to my attention. Well, I already knew it, but was trying to ignore the need for a rewrite. I like this better. The change foreshadows the actions of the hero in later chapters, but keeps the tension up. Or so I think....What about you all? stargazer
Partial of change made.
Panic engulfed Piper as she returned to consciousness. A muscular leg tucked between her thighs moved rhythmically and she was pulled tight against a big chest. A hand fondled her right breast. Panic escalated into full-blown fear and she fought like a feral animal to free herself.
Sharp blows to his chest and kicks to his shins brought Niklas straight to the surface. His eyes snapped open just as he heard Piper's first sob.
"Piper it's me. Niklas," he whispered urgently. "It's Niklas, Piper. I won't hurt you."
Niklas was freeing her from his arms and body as fast as he could, but her flailing arms and legs made it more difficult. She stumbled from the bed and ran into the bathroom. The shower came on and he jumped up and knocked loudly on the door.
"Can I see you Piper? Just to be sure you're alright." Silence met his words.
"I'm sorry if I did anything to alarm you while I was asleep. Did I try something and cause you to wake up frightened?" This was not going the way he planned. Not at all.
"I'm coming in Piper. If you need to cover up, do it now," Niklas warned softly through the door.
Piper watched the handle turn and the door crept slowly inward. The guy couldn't take her word for it, could he? Not Niklas-he had to see for himself. She turned the water off and snatched the robe hanging on a hook next to the shower and pulled it on with hurried movements. Niklas' scent lingered in the velvet-like softness of the material and she closed her eyes. She was rubbing her face in its softness when Niklas spoke.
"Piper," Niklas said. "Are you okay?"
Her eyes opened wide at the gentleness in his voice. "I'm okay Niklas. I just freaked for a moment when I woke up and didn't know where I was." A shudder of humiliation slithered through her. She absolutely loathed the unconscious effect Blaine had stamped on her mind.
"Soon you won't have to worry about that monster ever again Piper."
Piper found his assertion strangely comforting. "I hope so Niklas. It's so draining emotionally to know he's lurking out there, spying on me. Waiting."
Piper watched as he strode back into the bedroom without another word, closing the door behind him with controlled anger.
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Niklas heard the shower come on again and he stood on the balcony staring unseeing out over the ocean. His hands were shaking. Rage slithered its evil presence into his thoughts.
He wanted to kill Blaine at this moment. But remorse would set in; and this action would negate everything he believed in morally and ethically. And as much as he wanted the man dead, he couldn't destroy himself in the process.
He heard the bathroom door open and he tossed his dangerous thoughts into the churning waves below and went back inside.
He opened his arms wide and Piper sailed into them without hesitation, moving against him as if trying to climb inside his skin. Or so his body thought.
"Thank you for being so understanding Niklas. I don't think most men would be," Piper murmured into his neck.
She wouldn't be thinking that if she realized he was armed and ready to shoot from the mere slid of her body against his, Niklas thought.
He would be patient-even if it killed him. Which right now, the little head was convinced it might. But the important thing was that the big head was in control.
"You're hard and ready aren't you Niklas?"
So much for her not being aware, Niklas thought. He nodded his head stiffly and prepared mentally for a well deserved rebuke.
"I'm sorry Niklas. I wasn't trying to be a cockteaser. I." The chest beneath her breasts was shaking. Rumbling. The guy was laughing.
Piper leaned back and hit him in the shoulder and he laughed even harder.
"What's so funny?" she demanded.
"I never expected to hear that word come out of your mouth." He was grinning. "When it did-it shocked me- but in a sexy way."
Piper watched his eyes crinkle at the corners as another deep laugh rolled out of him. "What are you laughing at now, big guy?"
He grabbed her hips and pulled her tightly against his groin. "You can tease my cock anytime, baby."
A knock sounded on the door and he pulled back from her. "Enter."
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Unpubbed author who doesn't post often to this web site as I've found my material is to erotic for most tastes on this site.
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