Personality Graveyard by Anstice Potts

Each time she looks me in the eyes
And sprouts her filthy, selfish lies,
Another part of me is slain,
Never to return again.

Love and pride and joy and trust
She has vanquished all to dust,
They lie beneath six feet of dirt
Where no more can they be hurt.

My hopes and dreams were slaughtered too
And now they're hidden out of view
Buried in an unmarked grave
There's nothing left of me to save.

-Written 28/02/10

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Teresa

04 March 2010

I love this! Rapier in it's point and fluid as it is read aloud. Keep it coming.

m n m n I

05 March 2010

Someone in one's life can be a very negative influence
It could be ourselves
Living a lie is self-destruction
It could be an abusive close relation playing with our head
hurting our self-esteem
It boils down to how honest we can be with the image in the mirror and keeping our integrity

Good work

taylorswift97

05 March 2010

Wow! The words just sort of pierce into you. Good! 

I do have a suggestion to make a bit of a better flow : where no more can they be hurt

Seems a bit expressionless - especially with all of the other strongly expressed lines, and doesn't seem to fit as well so maybe you can change that a bit.

Other than that, I felt this, so nice work!

Also see: Writing Therapy (Anstice Potts) • A Languston Hughes' poem (iram 24) • The Whispers (REDONE - 670 words) (ThePaperGypsy) • Partial rewrite of Chapter 4 of Cuffs, Lies and Fantasy Rides. (stargazer) • To Chrissiejo (stargazer) • To mnmnl (stargazer) • To Evita (stargazer) • Carl is Awesome! (stargazer) • To Grampa Pogi (stargazer) • To Churchmouse (stargazer)

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