Miss you, love you like crazy 
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Kudos 6.00 after 7 votes |
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Miss you, Love you like crazy
She misses his face she used to touch
Sometimes her thoughts are just blank
Eyes wide open and shut for a while
A moment with vision of his existance
His tender embrace and warm touch settles her down.
His love letters are just few years old
It moves her like an old wooden top
Spinning on the palm of her left hand
Running through her arms straight to her heart
Sensations are exciting, cannot define the meaning.
Rotating distance irritates relationship
Days without him are blank grey years
Something missing......Newspaper without highlighted news
Playing solitaire without King of Ace
But Queen of heart patiently waiting.
Each morning her soft freckled skin is dry
His sealed marmalade kiss is her vitamin e
Missing him is unbearable and difficult to hide
If in 2 nights he's still invisible and out of sight
Dear heart just visit her at nearby mental hospital
Kudos 6.00 after 7 votes |
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Comments, critiques and replies
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Ouch! "waiting patiently", couldn't believe you'd write about my love story. Anyway, this
is beautiful, though I must say, the truth hurts. And yes, I'm still crazy in love. What can I do.
Kudos! | Anonymous [107] | 04/03/2010 |
This poem is so personal,
I can feel the pain
but it's like too much . . . | m n m n I [365] | 04/03/2010 |
Thank you to all for your comments,
m n m n I ,
Of course head over heels she is so mad about him,,, high intensity and mercury rising, hehehe , thanks | lomliyavi [38] | 05/03/2010 |
Good! The words you chose really help the readers feel the pain you are trying to express. | taylorswift97 [360] | 05/03/2010 |
oh, maybe online presence will be helpful =) | Evita Sagalongos [213] | 05/03/2010 |
First two stanzas were excellent. The last two needs to match those in their intensity and style. Good
work. | ChrissieJo [199] | 05/03/2010 |
First two stanzas were excellent. The last two needs to match those in their intensity and style. Good
work. | ChrissieJo [199] | 05/03/2010 |
Our living souls have secret feelings/ secret thoughts inside which only come out when we write poetry
, etc... Thanks taylorswift | lomliyavi [38] | 05/03/2010 |
Just trying to lighten up the mood, she has mood swing... I apprecite it Chrissiejoe thanks. | lomliyavi [38] | 05/03/2010 |
Good job:) keep up the good work:) | Beaner [23] | 08/03/2010 |
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