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Once again this is really well written. There is just a certain warmth that your writing gives. I'm not sure how you do it, but your pieces seem so effortless and really honest, if you know what I mean, yet it still fits together so well.
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Beautiful love Beautiful poem
I hope the last line which is your next line is not just a line
because my line would be
(=: "You say that to all the guys" :=)
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sweet poem =)
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Beautiful, Avi. It's just like a chapter in my life where when it's time to say our goodbyes after all the kisses and fleeting moments and not sure if we'd see other other again, I just broke down. Had to compose myself when the plane touched down. I hate goodbyes. I want love to stay even just in my dreams. And yes, my love is forever and I hope yours is too. And please don't make me cry next time. You moved me, Avi.
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And please don't let mnmnI's unwanted last line affect your writing. That's his own way of saying it, from a man's viewpoint. Just keep on loving and writing beautiful poems. I'm really happy for you and your man.
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Nothing personal, lomliyavi
It was almost 3am after I posted my latest poem
So I thought I'd wind down by making a comment
just to lighten up
I was just being facetious :=)
I guess it came across as insensitive
I apologize
Will you forgive me?
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Evita, sweet thanks to you. Wait for more sweet surprises from Avi.
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Possum I feel you are A and L, thank you miss Adorable and miss Lovable. Just maybe we are the same but in different boat or Love boat, hmmmm
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New line,last line, just a line, film, or movie...the bottom line is , it is a very powerful line, let me say a POWER line full of high energy which light up her world.
For me, it is an ASSURANCE, hand and hand together as one.
About your line, you crippled my Friday mood mnmnI and made me cry, huhuhu.
I'm imagining you as a cat BM, cat's very sensitive part is it's nose I want to pinch, squeeze it (apologies to all cat lovers) and say how could you tell that to a sweet lady sexy love like her, she is sensitive but full of passion and kindness, to give her true self to one and only love of her life.
I'm happy now, Daddy said "don't feel sad, it's just a line, you have your own line and it is your unique way to show it". A big smiley face to Daddy.
Thank you mnmnI
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Thank you, Avi. I'm glad that you're happy again, and your Daddy's right. It's your last line that matters for that's how you want to express your love.
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This poem had such a nice flow to it, Is is so beautiful. I love your work, keep it up!
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lomliyavi, I just noticed you responded to my comment
I just noticed my name buried in the response and at the end
Hope you're still happy now
The truth is that your poem seemed very close to my experience
She'd say to me that she cherishes me throughout eternity
I'd make light of it, and say "You say that to all the guys"
but I'd see eternity in her smiling eyes . . .
I'm happy you're happy
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m n m n i,
Everlasting love brings special happy smiles. Truly she has that eternal love inside her heart. I can feel you're such a lucky guy, hope and wish, you both Enjoy Every Moment your lasting love.
We are both happy now . Yipeee!!
thanks m n m n i.
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A sure sign of a good poem I think, can be drawn from the different reactions and interpretations it sparks in each readers mind, plainly seen, in the comments posted here responding in kind.
I think it fair to say, they are nothing if not views and ideas honestly given, a point here worth mentioning I believe, as they reflect the powerful honesty conveyed in this poem.
Sentiments all, that find perfect expression across 4 highly poetic verses. A poem very much ennoyed by this reader.
I look forward to reading much more of your work.
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