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Hi dollybyrd. I looked at your first submission, and this is much better. The writing is tighter and you are not trying to cram everything in at once.
As an avid reader of first world war writing I look forward to reading further pieces from you.
One suggestion, It might be wise to change the line single limb blown off, as for a casualty clearing station during a battle it could be as little as gas inhalation, flesh wounds or broken legs etc and for a general hospital even less- trench foot, T.B. V.D. etc. Both of course took casualties with horrific injuries also.
Read as much as you can on the subject. Tommy by prof Richard Holmes and The first day of the Somme and The Kaisers battle by Martin Middlebrook are very good factual books on the subject. and include memoires of nursing staff.
From a writing point of view I thought that your revised submission was very good.
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Hello again dollybyrd. I may have given you some misleading information. To clarify: All casualties passed through a casualty clearing station (CCS) but T.B. patients would be sent to a separate tuberculosis hospital where they would be feed on whole chicken, milk pudding and Guinness. The unfortunates that contracted venereal disease would also be sent to a specialist hospital where there was a very strict regime as to catch VD was unofficially considered a self-inflicted wound. To compound the misery, their pay was also stopped during the treatment. Everyone else would be sent on to a base or general hospital.
Hope this helps.
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