The Writers' Circle

Hi Grampa, I like this story idea, and it is something that would appeal to me if I saw it on the bookshelf, or read it on a book cover. Re the synopsis, are the second and third paragraphs the wrong way round chronologically. I had to read it twice before I understood the sequence of the story. Presumably, Gus's secret is uncovered by the operatives that he has hired. Not sure if you should use the words unforgettable cast of characters. Maybe "with the unforgettable Ron Bello and a richly painted cast of characters" would sound better.

Anyway, I like the story line. It makes sense, and is believable enough to hold the interest.  Good luck with it.

Thanks also to MnmnI for sending his suggestions via private email some of which had been incorporated herewith.

Grampa

Thank you so much Keiron. I heard that too, that the second is harder but I guess it's because the first one would usually be the baby, that all the juice had gone forth to make it work and for the subsequent book, it would be harder to come up with a new plot.
Writing the synopsis is equally challenging.  Synopses would usually appear on the covers or the flaps and more people in retail shelves would make their decisions based on the spark they'd feel when shopping for a new book; if the summary sucks, the book goes back to collect more dust.
Again, my thanks for your comment. It would surely help when making the final *script* on the synopsis.

Grampa

It looks great to me. Just enough information and suspense to grab the reader and make them want to know what happens. Here are some good links for stuff like this:

http://www.writersdigest.com/article/your-guide-to-an-effective-novel-synopsis/

http://www.writersdigest.com/article/your-essential-synopsis-checklist/

And a list of agents:

http://www.writersdigest.com/article/24-agents-who-want-your-work-2009/

        Best of luck!
                 Gate Keeper

Thanks for your comment Gatekeeper. I'll definitely check up those links you've suggested and good luck to you as well.

Grampa

Thanks Elaineh, it's a long haul on the editing part, but it's quite rewarding to do the polishing after several months of nothing but wracking my brains (assuming I still have some left, ha ha ha :-). There are still plenty to take out (especially those that garnered some comments from the circle) and possibly some to add in and hopefully, I could make justice to the current plot.

I haven't been quite alert with what's going on in the circle . . . I have a lot of catching up to do . . . 

Good luck to you as well and to the rest of our circle family.

:-)
Grampa