Love Intertwined by Eilidh333

We watch them as their friendship grows,
Their lives entwined within a rose.

They sit here now without a care,
Smiling, happy their friendship's rare.

They love each other, but neither knows,
They think their friendship's come to close.

They're older now their future's set,
Their hands are joined in silhouette.

Together, happy they now stand,
Two rings upon her dainty hand.

From children they now have their own,
Each child's fate is still unknown.

Years have passed, their love still grows,
There love is an eternal rose.

Together they will always lie,
Even in death love does not die.

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Comments

churchmouse

08 May 2010

nice little poem Eilidh333, I think that it is much better than some of the others that you have posted and that your work is improving. The only line that didn't quite work for me was the third, it felt a bit "clunky" but apart from that I liked it very much.
Well done.

rock chick

12 May 2010

A nice poem, a bit mushy for me personally, but it tells the story in a competant way.

Also see: A Silent Tear (Eilidh333) • traitor (wolfeyesofgoldenrays) • Love Comes But Once (Possum) • Cheesy Move (lomliyavi) • It's too late (Dark Angel Alice) • Quantum Suicide (GenieRaine) • Waiting for that first call (mlambere) • The not (Elkapan) • Darkness is King (elaineh) • Shutters of your Mind (elaineh)

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Writer Eilidh333	Total posts: 60
Roles: Writer

Edinburgh, Scotland, UNITED KINGDOM

Hi my name's Eilidh and i'm from Edinburgh in Scotland. I love writing poetry and have done since I was very young, please have a look at my work and tell me what you think. Thanks!

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Genre / category: Poetry