The Writers' Circle

Thats an odd thing to Ask zzywhizzy.
Better to ask who enjoyed it than is it any good.
If you like it and are happy with it, then thats all that matters.

You have created a piece of work that is thought provoking, of course its good.
Someone might point out a typo here or there on some of your work, but that doesnt mean its not good.

I am not someone who will prented to understand a lot about poetry, I like poems when they rhyme. I dont follow Haiku's or Terza rima that much at all.

Yours though I can follow. I like it.
I think its good.

:)

This poem is ver moving and touching Izzywhizzy. I found that it provoked feelings of utter emotion inside my soul, and not many people can portray these feelings with poetry. I congratulate you.

Anonymous3

Hi Izzywhizz!

I think your poem is amazing! I wish I could write like that ;D

FallenAngel3 x

I really like the idea of this poem. I think you did a great job at expressing the feelings you wanted to show in this - sadness, mourning, love, emptiness. 

But one thing I want to point out the rhythm is a little off in the second line of the first stanza. You could shorten it to something like "The greatest sadness comes that anyone could fear". Also the second line in the third stanza is a bit awkward. For it to flow more smoothly, you may want to shorten that line. 

I really like how well you rhymed in this as well. Keep it up.

This is good - loved the way you use 2 line verses - particularly liked the line about it being 'the person with whom you were always hand in hand' because that threw up a real image for me which is always important in poetry that the person reading it can identify with what you are talking about.  Well done.

Hi, Izzy!  It's not important whether they rhyme or not.  What is important is if you have expressed your feelings in your poem and these feelings have been felt by the readers.  Well done!

Please vote!!!!!!!!!!!

- Izzywhizzy